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Hi Brooklyn I like your story and it was punctuated really well but the last sentence was a little creepy keep up the good work.

Josh

 

 

 

Hi Charlie I like your piece maybe next time edit your piece before you post it because there were some capital letters missing otherwise a really good piece.

Josh

 

 

Hi Dalia I like your piece maybe next time edit your piece before you post it because there were some capital letters missing otherwise a really good piece.

Josh

 

 

Hi Hamish I liked your work and it is a really good piece but maybe next time right in English and not in an Italian accent. It was very well written and edited piece good job keep up the good work.

Josh

100wc

Those dominoes just magically appeared out of nowhere, and nearly squashed an innocent poor tourist. Police quickly rushed to the scene to investigate what had happened. It’s not every day giant dominoes fall from the sky. As the police were examining the dominoes a tourist came up to the police and said “this thing nearly squashed me mate”. The police were investigating the scene and found evidence that aliens from mars wanted to kill humans to stop them from invading their planet. They thought that falling dominoes would scare the humans away but instead it just made them angrier.

100wc

As I walked through the door I saw a hat on the table. I said what is that hat doing on the table? The hat was a broad brim blue hat and had feathers sticking out of the top. It was hideous. Why on earth would my sister go out and buy that hat of all hats. That thing had to go in the bin, and be gone for good. It was my job to do that. As I approached the hat I realised my sister put an alarm system on it, so there was no way I was getting to it.

100wc

I was racing to work on my scooter and I was late, I had to be late today of all days. I had an important meeting to go to today and my poster boards are with me. I finally made it to work and I set up for my presentation but my poster boards had gone transparent, I walked out of the room excitedly that I didn’t have to do my presentation. Then a woman in a rose dress approached me and said are you ready for your presentation sir.

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They were coming out from every direction these mutant little creepy things that come out of the ground. They are so creepy and once you see one it will haunt you for the rest of your life, until you’re dead. And when you’re dead it haunts your children, and so on until it kills your whole family. But you can defeat it if you somehow can see them without it seeing you, only one person has ever done that and hardly survived, because it is a very torturous path and it will kill you if you’re not careful.

 

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I was so cross that I just lost the plot. I ripped out all my hair, it wasn’t funny. The next thing I know, I have twelve different people yelling at me. I was so mad it was indescribable the rage I had. The next day the rage was all gone but I was still on edge. But anything could tick me off. Then it happened, somebody ticked me off. I was so enraged I just left walked out, I was so mad I never went back to any place with people ever again.

100wc

The sky was red from the sunset, but it was ruined by some guy on a giant ladder eating chocolate coins. That absolutely just ruined the red sky. I was so hoping that he fell straight onto the pavement below.  As I was standing there hoping the man with the ladder fell to his doom, I noticed I was sinking into the pavement. Still hoping the man with the ladder would fall to his doom I was still sinking, I had to do something fast. The man with the ladder finally fell to his death, and that was my final thing I saw.

100WC

The vinegar was so sharp it should never have been invented. It’s just like who does like salt and vinegar anything. But when you just have vinegar by itself it is very sharp. The vinegar was very acidic it makes your face crinkle up like a tin can. It tastes sour and bitter at the same time. The vinegar was disgusting it was unbearable it was bitter, salty and sour all at the same time. Salt and vinegar chips are so bad that they should never have been invented the vinegar was so sharp

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yesterday I went to hollywood , venice beach and the la Brea tar pits. the tar pits are just tar pits but there filled with fossils from the ice age.

today I went to san fransisco. I went to alkatraz island witch is a old prison in san fransisco. I also saw wild seals and went on a cable cart.
Image result for la brea tar pits    La Brea tar pits
Image result for venice beach    Venice beach