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Hi Brooklyn I like your story and it was punctuated really well but the last sentence was a little creepy keep up the good work.

Josh

 

 

 

Hi Charlie I like your piece maybe next time edit your piece before you post it because there were some capital letters missing otherwise a really good piece.

Josh

 

 

Hi Dalia I like your piece maybe next time edit your piece before you post it because there were some capital letters missing otherwise a really good piece.

Josh

 

 

Hi Hamish I liked your work and it is a really good piece but maybe next time right in English and not in an Italian accent. It was very well written and edited piece good job keep up the good work.

Josh

100wc

Those dominoes just magically appeared out of nowhere, and nearly squashed an innocent poor tourist. Police quickly rushed to the scene to investigate what had happened. It’s not every day giant dominoes fall from the sky. As the police were examining the dominoes a tourist came up to the police and said “this thing nearly squashed me mate”. The police were investigating the scene and found evidence that aliens from mars wanted to kill humans to stop them from invading their planet. They thought that falling dominoes would scare the humans away but instead it just made them angrier.

100wc

As I walked through the door I saw a hat on the table. I said what is that hat doing on the table? The hat was a broad brim blue hat and had feathers sticking out of the top. It was hideous. Why on earth would my sister go out and buy that hat of all hats. That thing had to go in the bin, and be gone for good. It was my job to do that. As I approached the hat I realised my sister put an alarm system on it, so there was no way I was getting to it.